I’m definitely not a writer, but “Fallen into a deep sleep, his face expressionless, a light snore escaped (escapes?) him” sounds nice to me.
I envy your confidence in writing! Every time I tried I get like 2 sentences down and immediately think “who the fuck am I to be writing something thinking anyone should even care to read this?” Lol
https://imgur.com/gallery/bullock-snoring-6cVTf4K
This would be a light snore, right??
“A light snore escaped him. He was in a sleep so deep he was completely devoid of expression.”
Yeah that sounds pretty light lol
I’m definitely not a writer, but “Fallen into a deep sleep, his face expressionless, a light snore escaped (escapes?) him” sounds nice to me.
I envy your confidence in writing! Every time I tried I get like 2 sentences down and immediately think “who the fuck am I to be writing something thinking anyone should even care to read this?” Lol
What’s Larry’s expression?
I can’t decide if he is sighing or sobbing
Maybe he’d be “weary”
Or disinterested, bored, depending on the greater context even possibly dejected.
Same honestly but I love thinking about writing!!! Thanks!!